热心公益的善良女孩打动芝加哥大学
- 2014年10月14日 11:00
- 来源：启德教育
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启德教育
启德留学
美国本科
美国留学
美国名校
芝加哥大学
【导读】启德美国本科名校申请成功案例
| 学生录取情况 |
| 姓名： |
J同学 |
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| 录取院校： |
芝加哥大学 |
测一测我的录取指数 |
| 申请专业： |
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| 录取专业： |
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| 留学入读阶段： |
本科 |
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| 录取时间： |
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| 学生背景 |
| 所学专业： |
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| GPA： |
3.48 |
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| 语言成绩： |
托福:NA,SAT: 1970 |
想要拿高分？ |
背景分析:
Activities 课外活动:
Community Service(Volunteer): Footprints-Founder/Vice President 社区活动（志愿者）; Ming Yuan Foundation, Project Leader Ming Yuan社区活动（志愿者）Ming Yuan基金会，项目负责人;Retirement Center 社区活动（志愿者）：养老院; Habitat for Humanity, Participant社区活动（志愿者）：仁人家园，参与者
Career Oriented职业导向活动: Future Business Leader of America, Member美国未来企业领袖协会，成员; McKinsey &Company, Internship麦肯锡公司实习生; Ping An Insurance, Internship平安保险实习生;
Other Club/Activiy 俱乐部活动: Tri-M Music Honor Society, Member Tri-M音乐荣誉协会，会员; Vocal-A capella, Member纯人声合唱团成员
Personal Statement 个人陈述:
J showed her heart for the community through her description of her involvement in a rural migrant school She described designing and leading a flute camp for the migrant children and shared what these children ended up teaching her through this experience.
J同学通过描述她参与帮助农民工弟子学校的孩子来表现出她对社会的热心。她描述了她是如何为这些外来务工者的孩子计划和主导了一个长笛兴趣营并分享了最终这些孩子是如何在这个经历中帮助她学到东西。
顾问点评:
J was a quiet girl who was very interested in people. She liked to help people, but wasn’t always sure how or struggled to connect this with an academic interest. One of our first conversations meandered from international relations to communications to business as J expressed her interest in people along with a certain bewilderment of how to apply this to a search for a college and a major. We started by encouraging J to develop her own voice as she designed and executed a flute camp at a migrant school in her family’s hometown. J used this confidence to set high goals with regards to her school list as she aimed for the University of Chicago. She did not allow difficulty with the SAT deter her even as she called me in tears after her third SAT score below 2000. I encouraged her to focus that much harder on other components of her application even as we prepared for yet another SAT exam. We animatedly discussed her favorite book one night as we developed this response to the University of Chicago short answer questions and J stayed focused regardless of test scores. J’s persistence paid off with her acceptance letter to University of Chicago - her shyness vanished as she triumphantly waved her acceptance letter and giddily plopped 2 pounds of dark chocolate truffles down in front of me in wordless gratitude.
J同学是一个喜欢关注“人”的安静的小姑娘。她喜欢帮助别人，她不知道如何，但是一直努力和她的学术兴趣联系起来。第一次和她交谈，我们从国际关系谈到传媒再到商科，但是J同学始终疑惑如果将她对于人的关注结合到学校和专业的申请中。J同学在她的老家为民工学校设计并举办了一个长笛兴趣营，我们以此开始鼓励她表达自己的心声。并建立起自信心以挑战更高的目标学校-芝加哥大学。
在J同学第三次SATI的成绩仍然没能到达2000分的时候，她含着泪给我打了电话。但是考试的困难并不能阻止她申请名校的决心。我鼓励她一边备考下次SAT，一边把经历放在申请的其他方面。为了回答芝加哥大学的申请问题，我们整个晚上都在兴致勃勃地谈论她喜欢的一本书。J同学也暂时忘记了自己的分数。J同学的坚持不懈得到了结果。全然不见平日害羞的她，得意地挥动着芝加哥的通知书，把一个2磅重的黑巧克力松露重重地放到我面前，不需要太多感谢的语言。
